Friday, February 10, 2012

I'm Hearing Voices: Emotion

So today was the hardest assignment yet for I'm Hearing Voices, if you ask me. Show some emotion in 250 words or less. I am going to give just a (tiny) bit of back story here. Amy is a seven-year-old girl, whom Sylvia has been 'mothering' since they've been locked in the school. (And I'm still under 250 with that.) ;)

Sylvia saw the grey hand reach out and grab Amy’s leg. It was like time just stopped for a second, then hurdled forward as Sylvia grabbed the gun and shot the zombie in the head. Blood splashed across Amy’s jeans, and the hand let go and fell to the cement floor. 

Sylvia didn’t have time to stop. She shoved Amy into the van, got in next to her and slammed the door shut. Erwin pealed out of the garage, thudding over the grey body they’d left behind. Her heart was pounding. She couldn’t look at Amy’s face. Instead she looked at the dark red blood on Amy’s pants. She felt herself hesitate, for just a second, afraid of what she might see. Then she pushed up the leg of Amy’s jeans.

Everything contracted around Sylvia’s heart so sharply it hurt, before slowly melting away and spreading through her limbs like warm water. Her hand trembled as she ran it over the girl’s pale, unbroken skin.

“It’s okay,” she whispered, trying to catch her breath, “you’re okay.” Goosebumps spread across her skin, and she looked up at Amy. Amy’s eyes were still wide with shock; the tears Sylvia had been trying to hold back, broke through. She held Amy and cried.

19 comments:

  1. Very tense stuff! Sylvia's emotions were described very well, well done! :D

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  2. Rachel, that was really good! And I'm not usually a fan of zombie books but I think I would definitely want to read more of this!

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  3. Ah... zombies. They are dangerous little buggers. Well done.

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  4. Oh man. I thought they were going to have to kill her! Such suspense!

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  5. Oh no, is Amy really okay? I'm kind of unsure! This is a great tense scene, Rachel :)

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  6. Thanks you guys! This has been a very fun blog fest, I'm so glad I joined in. I've loved reading everyone else's too!

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  7. I'm all for Zombie stories, even though I'm pretty sure I'll pee my pants several times while reading it, lol.

    I'm kinda unsure about Amy too. I hope everything really is okay!

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  8. Thanks! And yes, Amy really is okay. (It's good to know that's not entirely clear!) I couldn't kill off a little kid. The teens however. . .

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  9. I'm not a fan of zombie stories but you hooked me in with how realistic everything around the zombies was.

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  10. I loved your entry. :) Your writing was brilliant :)

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  11. i felt the urgency and desperation, but they arent safe yet, are they?!
    nice job!

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  12. Emotion and splattered zombie brains as an added extra!

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  13. Ewww! Freaky and scary! This is great. I might have nightmares tonight, but you did awesome!

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  14. awe, really intense and vivid! Great stuff! Sorry I only caught the back end of this blogfest. It sounds like it was such a good time! Looking forward to your post for the origins blogfest!

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  15. I can't wait to read the book!!!

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