Monday, July 16, 2012

Hookers

Not those kind of hookers.

The girls at Falling for Fiction are hosting a Hookers and Hangers blog hop. Today we are posting some of the 'hookers' from our WIP. (Hookers as in first lines from chapters, meant to 'hook' you.)

I am using lines from my MG fairy tale re-telling GRETEL.

Before I show you my lines, here's what I've learned from going through my WIP for this blog hop. My hookers are kinda' weak. I will definitely be going through again and trying to find ways to strengthen them. A big THANK YOU to the girls at Falling for Fiction for doing this! It's not only a super fun hop, it's a very helpful one as well! (But you knew that already.) ;)

So here are some of my hookers:


We sat at the dinner table with little to eat and nothing to say. 

If my step-mother was ice, the old woman was fire.

I was frosting a rich chocolate cake when I first saw it.

“I will tell you again, child, I am no fool.”

The night was filled with nightmares.

She glared at me, her lovely eyes narrowing down to tiny blue slits.


Come back for my 'hangers' on the 18th and go check out the other by clicking the link above. I'm excited to see what other people have done!

44 comments:

  1. Good lines. I like the fire/ice one. I hadn't thought much about hookers/hangers either, so I'll definitely be paying more attention too.

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    1. Well, food does play a major role in Hansel & Gretel. ;)

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  3. I love the first line. Well, I love all of them, lol. But that first one totally has me going... aww. :( Great job, missy!!! And thanks for joining the bloghop! Can't wait to see your hangers :)

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  4. Love the first three lines - they drew me in! I love your short post - I think I went a little overboard with mine. I learned a lot too from this exercise. Some of my first lines had me wincing.

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  5. Love, love, love the fire and ice line!

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  6. Those lines are great. I like the first one best because it holds so much emotional value in it. A picture of people sitting at a table ignoring each other popped into my had right away.

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  7. I like the ice and fire one. Nice job!

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  8. The first and last were my favs! These are all so good tho! Great Hookers.

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  9. I think these are really good! 1,2,4 and 6 are all really great!

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  10. Oh wow, these are awesome! I think after this hop I will have to upgrade my hookers. 'I am not worthy.' *bows in submission* :)

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  11. The fire and ice line is awesome!

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  12. These are great! That second one, oooooooh, chills!! Nicely done :)

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  13. These are better than I think you think they are (did you follow that? :) They are great. #3 is definitely my favorite.

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  14. These are better than you think. First one very good.

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  15. I love the first one! And the fire and ice one is really cool too! I also love that they are short, mine all feel like run on sentences, probably because they are.

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  16. Oh I like the 2nd and 3rd one! This is such a fun blog hop and I can see how it's super helpful! Great job :)

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  17. oh I love your first line. All of them are great, but I was hooked right away by the 1st :)

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  18. Me too! I liked them all, but really was drawn to the first one and the fourth one! Well done! What a great premise too!

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  19. "If my step-mother was ice, the old woman was fire." <--I really like this one. And now I really want chocolate cake too.

    Looking forward to the hangers!

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  20. I disagree that they are weak. I love #1. It is subtle, but says volumes.

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  21. I like the one about the chocolate cake! And I love the idea of a retelling of Hansel & Gretel from Gretel's perspective.

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  22. I agree with everyone else, the fire and ice one is great. But I think all of them are good. Great job!

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  23. they were all good, but I really liked the second one and the last one. good job!

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  24. I like the one about ice and fire. Well worded!

    Allison (Geek Banter)

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  25. Love the ice and fire. Great images!

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  26. I don't know, I think most of these are pretty darn good! LOVE the fire and ice. And I'll have a piece of that chocolate cake please :)

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  27. These are all fab, the first is probably my fave!

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    1. Just to say thank you for your comment on mine, have had an error and not been able to publish it :( but I appreciate it!

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  28. I love your first line. It's a great way to start.

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  29. I agree with a lot of the above comments - the first line is great!! I can't quite figure out which woman would be worse, ice or fire, so kudos to you for making opposites equally terrifying.

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  30. chilling and thrilling! all great opening lines!

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  31. Thanks everyone! You guys are too sweet. :)

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  32. You said you're going through to strengthen? I loved all of these, especially the little to eat, the fire and ice. They're all really well done!

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  33. The second one definitely peaks my interest! :)

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  34. We writers are so hard on ourselves. You've got some awesome hookers here!

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  35. Oh, what are you talking about? You've got some great opening lines here! I especially like the first one...

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  36. These are great! I like the fire and ice line too. Neither are good, I guess.

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  37. I LOVE that first line. It captures so much about the world and the characters already.

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  38. Me likes! All of them. No favorites. :)

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  39. I especially like the first two!

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  40. These sound great! The first two are my faves as well. :)

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  41. Hi Rachel! Your opening sentence is great. Loved it! Sentence two is also nice. What a contrast!

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