Wednesday, July 18, 2012

Hangers

It's day two of Falling for Fiction's Hookers and Hangers bloghop. Today we are posting our hangers, the lines of our manuscript that end chapters and (hopefully) leave you hanging, making it impossible to not read just a bit more! (Click the link above to check out the others.)

A big, BIG thank you to the girls at Falling for Fiction! You rock! This bloghop has been so much fun, and very helpful. It's great to focus in on these sorts of things. So thank you so much!

I'm sharing lines from my MG novel, GRETEL. You can check out some of my 'hookers' here.

I panicked that day, and Hansel would pay for it every day after.

“Well," the old woman said, gripping Hansel's arm, "since you ate something of mine, perhaps I’ll eat something of yours.”

"Yes," I lied.

She spoke quietly, spinning her tale into my ear.

“Either way, I’ll be happy.” She smiled, showing her yellow, twisted teeth.

The witch was waiting for us.

I knew what I had to do.

The witch stopped laughing.

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37 comments:

  1. SuziJuly 18, 2012 at 5:45 AM

    Ohh. #1 doesn't sound good. I wish I knew what happened right before.

    Good hangers--would keep me reading. Especially with that nasty witch.

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  2. AmberJuly 18, 2012 at 5:58 AM

    oh this sounds creepy in a fun and magical way. I love retellings. These are awesome! Truly.

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  3. Michelle GregoryJuly 18, 2012 at 6:16 AM

    great ending line.

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  4. Kimberly GabrielJuly 18, 2012 at 6:57 AM

    These are intense! I love them!!

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  5. Tobi SummersJuly 18, 2012 at 6:59 AM

    Ooh, I really like 1, 2, and 5, but they're all really suspenseful. I'd keep reading!

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  6. Lisa ReganJuly 18, 2012 at 7:21 AM

    1, 2 and 4 are my favorites. I love these. They really have me wanting to read the story!

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  7. Kyra LennonJuly 18, 2012 at 7:35 AM

    Some of these are so creepy!I love them!

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  8. Jennie BennettJuly 18, 2012 at 7:48 AM

    Reading them in a row like that was almost like reading a min-story, one that I very much enjoyed. Great job!

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  9. prerna pickettJuly 18, 2012 at 7:53 AM

    four and the last one are my favorite!

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  10. Hope RobersonJuly 18, 2012 at 7:58 AM

    So eerily creepy! They just got better and better with each one too! Great suspense here!

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  11. cleemckenzieJuly 18, 2012 at 7:59 AM

    Yes to all of these. Loved them.

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  12. Ink in the BookJuly 18, 2012 at 8:11 AM

    I like #2. Deliciously scary!

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  13. KimJuly 18, 2012 at 8:14 AM

    Oh, these are all great, but I like #2 as well. So creepy...

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  14. Jenny S. MorrisJuly 18, 2012 at 8:24 AM

    These are all great. #2 is awesome. What of hers will she eat, an arm, finger, maybe a tasty toe? Yikes.

    Thank you so much for participating!!!

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  15. Emily R. KingJuly 18, 2012 at 8:40 AM

    "The witch was waiting for us." Gripping!

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  16. Tara TylerJuly 18, 2012 at 9:04 AM

    classic! love these foreboding lines! bet it's packed with fun torture!

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  17. VikLitJuly 18, 2012 at 9:50 AM

    "The witch was waiting for us". Eek! Sounds great!

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  18. Nancy ThompsonJuly 18, 2012 at 10:05 AM

    They're all great, but I love the second one best. I can just picture her saying that and cackling all the while!

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  19. RenaJuly 18, 2012 at 10:59 AM

    OMG, number two gave me the shivers. Great job!

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  20. 1000th.monkeyJuly 18, 2012 at 11:07 AM

    I liked the:

    "Yes", I lied.

    line the best, 'cause I just want to know what the lie is and why she's lying ;)

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  21. Elizabeth SeckmanJuly 18, 2012 at 11:13 AM

    I like the "I lied" too. Simply devious!

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  22. Leigh CovingtonJuly 18, 2012 at 11:24 AM

    This is awesome! 1 and 2 are my faves, but they're all so fun. Coolest book idea EVER!

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  23. CristinaJuly 18, 2012 at 12:35 PM

    oh these are all SO GOOD. I LOVE number one.

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  24. Rachel SchieffelbeinJuly 18, 2012 at 1:16 PM

    Thank you all for the kind words! This has been a very fun hop!

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  25. Rachel FrostJuly 18, 2012 at 1:23 PM

    I love the line, '"Yes," I lied.' Hansel and Gretel, very interesting. :O

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  26. L.M. MillerJuly 18, 2012 at 1:45 PM

    Oh, I love the second one. The fact that we know the full threat behind it makes it even better.

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  27. Krista McLaughlinJuly 18, 2012 at 2:43 PM

    I love the second to last - definitely makes me curious!

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  28. Kelley LynnJuly 18, 2012 at 3:58 PM

    The second one is SO good. I wonder what she's going to eat of hers???

    Thanks so much for participating! Glad you enjoyed it :)

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  29. Heather R. HoldenJuly 18, 2012 at 5:36 PM

    Loving all these hangers, the second one especially--what a creepy threat!

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  30. DL HammonsJuly 18, 2012 at 6:09 PM

    Oh....#1 is a real keeper!! :)

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  31. AnonymousJuly 18, 2012 at 6:16 PM

    #1 is really awesome. Sounds like a great end to a chapter and intriguing idea to make me turn to the next chapter. Nice job.

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  32. TrishaJuly 18, 2012 at 6:31 PM

    I love these. My favourite, oddly enough, is possibly this one:

    "Yes," I lied.

    I love it when people lie in dialogue and we get told about it. Maybe I'm weird ;)

    also love the one about the tale spinning in the ear. :)

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  33. sueJuly 18, 2012 at 6:58 PM

    fairy tales! looks great

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  34. Misha GerrickJuly 19, 2012 at 6:51 AM

    My favorite is '"Yes," I lied.'

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  35. Sheena-kay GrahamJuly 19, 2012 at 10:47 PM

    I panicked that day, and Hansel would pay for it every day after. - That hanger touched me most. I really like your story. Thanks for checking out my entry.

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  36. UnknownJuly 20, 2012 at 4:04 AM

    #1 & #2 are my picks.

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  37. Cassie MaeJuly 20, 2012 at 9:36 AM

    Oh, I remember when I first read that first one. Totally got to me. Love these, Rachel!

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