Wednesday, July 18, 2012

Hangers

It's day two of Falling for Fiction's Hookers and Hangers bloghop. Today we are posting our hangers, the lines of our manuscript that end chapters and (hopefully) leave you hanging, making it impossible to not read just a bit more! (Click the link above to check out the others.)

A big, BIG thank you to the girls at Falling for Fiction! You rock! This bloghop has been so much fun, and very helpful. It's great to focus in on these sorts of things. So thank you so much!

I'm sharing lines from my MG novel, GRETEL. You can check out some of my 'hookers' here.

I panicked that day, and Hansel would pay for it every day after.

“Well," the old woman said, gripping Hansel's arm, "since you ate something of mine, perhaps I’ll eat something of yours.”

"Yes," I lied.

She spoke quietly, spinning her tale into my ear.

“Either way, I’ll be happy.” She smiled, showing her yellow, twisted teeth.

The witch was waiting for us.

I knew what I had to do.

The witch stopped laughing.

37 comments:

  1. Ohh. #1 doesn't sound good. I wish I knew what happened right before.

    Good hangers--would keep me reading. Especially with that nasty witch.

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  2. oh this sounds creepy in a fun and magical way. I love retellings. These are awesome! Truly.

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  3. Ooh, I really like 1, 2, and 5, but they're all really suspenseful. I'd keep reading!

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  4. 1, 2 and 4 are my favorites. I love these. They really have me wanting to read the story!

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  5. Some of these are so creepy!I love them!

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  6. Reading them in a row like that was almost like reading a min-story, one that I very much enjoyed. Great job!

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  7. four and the last one are my favorite!

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  8. So eerily creepy! They just got better and better with each one too! Great suspense here!

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  9. Yes to all of these. Loved them.

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  10. Oh, these are all great, but I like #2 as well. So creepy...

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  11. These are all great. #2 is awesome. What of hers will she eat, an arm, finger, maybe a tasty toe? Yikes.

    Thank you so much for participating!!!

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  12. "The witch was waiting for us." Gripping!

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  13. classic! love these foreboding lines! bet it's packed with fun torture!

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  14. "The witch was waiting for us". Eek! Sounds great!

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  15. They're all great, but I love the second one best. I can just picture her saying that and cackling all the while!

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  16. OMG, number two gave me the shivers. Great job!

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  17. I liked the:

    "Yes", I lied.

    line the best, 'cause I just want to know what the lie is and why she's lying ;)

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  18. I like the "I lied" too. Simply devious!

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  19. This is awesome! 1 and 2 are my faves, but they're all so fun. Coolest book idea EVER!

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  20. oh these are all SO GOOD. I LOVE number one.

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  21. Thank you all for the kind words! This has been a very fun hop!

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  22. I love the line, '"Yes," I lied.' Hansel and Gretel, very interesting. :O

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  23. Oh, I love the second one. The fact that we know the full threat behind it makes it even better.

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  24. I love the second to last - definitely makes me curious!

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  25. The second one is SO good. I wonder what she's going to eat of hers???

    Thanks so much for participating! Glad you enjoyed it :)

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  26. Loving all these hangers, the second one especially--what a creepy threat!

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  27. Oh....#1 is a real keeper!! :)

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  28. #1 is really awesome. Sounds like a great end to a chapter and intriguing idea to make me turn to the next chapter. Nice job.

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  29. I love these. My favourite, oddly enough, is possibly this one:

    "Yes," I lied.

    I love it when people lie in dialogue and we get told about it. Maybe I'm weird ;)

    also love the one about the tale spinning in the ear. :)

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  30. I panicked that day, and Hansel would pay for it every day after. - That hanger touched me most. I really like your story. Thanks for checking out my entry.

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  31. Oh, I remember when I first read that first one. Totally got to me. Love these, Rachel!

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