tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post6816641284144983182..comments2024-03-29T02:21:51.087-07:00Comments on Writing on the Wall: Dust it Off Blog Hop: day 2Rachel Schieffelbeinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01629400142880123520noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-52709648301175512922012-05-07T02:47:10.835-07:002012-05-07T02:47:10.835-07:00Aww, this was adorable and charming. I loved how y...Aww, this was adorable and charming. I loved how your described Penelope and the fairy village.<br /><br />I especially liked this part: "<i>Well the flowers were whispering about it, of course, but it’s so hard to get any real information out of them. The way they gossip and giggle all day, it’s shameful really. Trees are much more reliable, but it’s hard to get two words out of them. So finally I had one of the bluebirds fly off to find out for me. He confirmed it. He said you were coming ... </i>"<br /><br />I read this, and was just nodding, thinking yes, that's what flowers and trees are like. Beautifully written.Clarehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06102199553293874800noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-45489607556172608822012-05-06T10:17:55.697-07:002012-05-06T10:17:55.697-07:00I love Penelope as well! She's so sweet. I als...I love Penelope as well! She's so sweet. I also love your description of the house. So delicate yet firm. Great job :)Shiela Calderón Blankemeierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05164253791139502033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-42413264762650004742012-05-06T10:02:08.158-07:002012-05-06T10:02:08.158-07:00Awww. I like Penelope too! :) Very well done.Awww. I like Penelope too! :) Very well done.Kelley Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06373650788799372118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-29530510598836161052012-05-06T08:47:54.462-07:002012-05-06T08:47:54.462-07:00Thanks you guys. You are too kind. (Seriously.) I ...Thanks you guys. You are too kind. (Seriously.) I will be posting tomorrow some of the many reason this one was left to get dusty. Although I do hope to be able to fix it up again some day. :)Rachel Schieffelbeinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01629400142880123520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-65016123476203665572012-05-05T19:48:38.220-07:002012-05-05T19:48:38.220-07:00Really cute excerpt!Really cute excerpt!Carrie-Annehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05810154378449825641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-55573348934400641742012-05-05T17:26:41.446-07:002012-05-05T17:26:41.446-07:00Love love love fairy stories! This was fun to read...Love love love fairy stories! This was fun to read :)<br /><br />AndreaAndrea Teaganhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02050710871603076745noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-23201573849960050112012-05-05T13:45:52.138-07:002012-05-05T13:45:52.138-07:00This is great! I love how she talks to the flowers...This is great! I love how she talks to the flowers and the birds.Elizabeth Briggshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14572251749088056704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-58055451184659409542012-05-05T12:15:51.275-07:002012-05-05T12:15:51.275-07:00Great world-building. Like the others, loved to kn...Great world-building. Like the others, loved to know about the flowers and the trees ... it makes me wonder whatelse is "magical" in this world. <br />Great excerpt!Juliana Haygerthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18028869545185578038noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-32144103372113910662012-05-05T11:33:22.094-07:002012-05-05T11:33:22.094-07:00That's such a great excerpt. The imagery and d...That's such a great excerpt. The imagery and dialogue are fabulous. Are you sure this one should stay dusty? ;)Christine Rainshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08263694662585963900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-73757543952207974532012-05-05T10:34:56.839-07:002012-05-05T10:34:56.839-07:00That was great - why did you stop working on it?That was great - why did you stop working on it?Annalisa Crawfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14943610814274794998noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-87263369287987359672012-05-05T10:22:40.187-07:002012-05-05T10:22:40.187-07:00You guys are so sweet! Thanks so much. :) Some day...You guys are so sweet! Thanks so much. :) Some day I hope to give it the revisions it needs and find a way to make it work. :)Rachel Schieffelbeinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01629400142880123520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-59166451324655917922012-05-05T09:28:51.182-07:002012-05-05T09:28:51.182-07:00I agree with everybody the line about the flowers ...I agree with everybody the line about the flowers whispering and the trees being reliable is great. I instantly envisioned this magical world full of giggling flowers and stoic trees. I can't believe this is shelved especially since agents are always saying how much they want middle grade novels. I really hope you dust this off completely and give it another shot.Theresahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10957479478228268972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-71935260292448253662012-05-05T08:16:05.133-07:002012-05-05T08:16:05.133-07:00Love the descriptions and the dialogue. I felt lik...Love the descriptions and the dialogue. I felt like I was right there in the fairy village. You really have something here.Avery Marshhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15615057600393412922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-78391340573058986162012-05-05T07:40:18.114-07:002012-05-05T07:40:18.114-07:00I loved the whispering flowers part. So enchanting...I loved the whispering flowers part. So enchanting and sweet! I want to read more!Danihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11026644605799767199noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-28965103130137124582012-05-05T07:38:59.154-07:002012-05-05T07:38:59.154-07:00This is just too cute to remain dusty! I hope you ...This is just too cute to remain dusty! I hope you can find time to revive it!Kyra Lennonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13853462182450429660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-36759414757174094952012-05-05T07:33:59.858-07:002012-05-05T07:33:59.858-07:00I agree with Cortney. This sounds so sweet.I agree with Cortney. This sounds so sweet.Renahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02767762370997304308noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-43195241788134190812012-05-05T06:45:15.281-07:002012-05-05T06:45:15.281-07:00Suzi's was my favorite too! This is so cute, P...Suzi's was my favorite too! This is so cute, Penelope seems like a great character. I hope you revive this story and give it another shot, it sounds adorable. :DCortney Pearsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00774060537148628453noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-80007601200025133782012-05-05T06:43:30.693-07:002012-05-05T06:43:30.693-07:00Thanks. That's the line I like, too. That'...Thanks. That's the line I like, too. That's part of why I used this bit. :)Rachel Schieffelbeinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01629400142880123520noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-878172058685455293.post-31299934683863664672012-05-05T06:34:22.805-07:002012-05-05T06:34:22.805-07:00Love the lines about the flowers being all gossipy...Love the lines about the flowers being all gossipy and giggley and trees being reliable. <br /><br />Penelope's character really comes across well.Suzihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16502606950280751205noreply@blogger.com